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2021.6.26雅思大陆写作7.5分范文|出国旅游是否是必要的

2021.6.26雅思大陆写作7.5分范文|出国旅游是否是必要的?

题目:

Some people think traveling abroad is necessary while others think that is not necessary because TV and the internet can give the same information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

有些人认为出国旅游是必要的,而另一些人认为没有必要,因为电视和互联网可以提供相同的信息。讨论这两种观点,给出你自己的意见。



结构思路

Paragraph 1 – Introduction

What is travelling abroad, what information can be gotten from TV and internet 

介绍背景信息

出国旅行的意义,电视和网络中能够获取的信息

Paragraph 2 

Internet and TV pros 

网络和电视所具有的优势:足不出户就能够获得大量的想获取的信息。

Paragraph 3 

Limitations of internet

网络的局限性:不能代替亲身的文化体验,比如品尝美食、体验不同气候、融于当地社会,etc。

Paragraph 4 

Importance of going abroad

出国旅行的必要性:能发现很多关于这个世界还有自己。

Paragraph 5 

My opinion and conclude

再次强调自己的观点和结论:走出舒适区,到海外旅行,在不断学习中成长。

Ever since the invention of commercial airplanes(商用飞机), travelling abroad has become a commonplace(司空见惯的事) occurrence. Whether it is for business, entertainment, study or other reasons, people visit other countries for different durations of time.(背景信息) Some believe that with the functions of TV and internet, travelling abroad is no longer necessary.(反方观点) However, I would argue otherwise. (自己观点:认同正方)

There are all sorts of programmes on television that feature foreign countries, including food and travel shows, movies and dramas. Along with the internet, where one can basically obtain any information(获得信息) they would like about a location, we can virtually(实际上) learn a great deal(学到很多) about another place without ever stepping foot outside(走出去) our home. (关于)

Despite(尽管) that, I think there are some experiences that we can never get if we do not physically journey to another country. One of these is being immersing(沉浸 使陷入) ourselves in the culture. Without going abroad, one would not have the opportunity to taste the local food, live in a different climate, or have face-to-face interactions(交流) with the native community(当地社会).

Many of those who have travelled abroad all agree that it is a unique adventure(冒险). From encountering(遭遇、遇见) an unfamiliar environment to slowly adjusting to new surroundings and customs, one can discover lots about the world and themselves just by voyaging overseas(海外旅行). While the internet media has expanded our knowledge(拓展知识) of the world, travelling abroad can further stretch our horizons(开拓视野).  (海外旅行带来的好处)

Just as the old Chinese proverb(谚语格言) says, ‘It is better to travel ten thousand miles than to read ten thousand books’. (引用论证)Although obtaining facts from TV and the internet are useful, real-world experiences are invaluable(无价的) as well. What better way to gain these than by stepping out of our comfort zones(舒适区) and travelling abroad? No matter where we are, we can grow and develop by having a heart to learn. Be it at home in front of the TV or computer screen, or(无论在家还是在哪儿) on a distant continent(大陆) altogether! (再次强调观点)

OGE签约作者:Viola,奥克兰大学校友,出生香港。


点评:

该作文为7.5 分范文。

双观点题型的题目最需要注意的是,在分别讨论过两方观点之后,还需要明确的给出自己的看法和观点,较简单来讲,就是确定两个观点中哪一个更加合理。在这篇范文中,笔者在首段就明确地表达了实际旅行的必要性,正文的三个段落分别讲了媒体的好处已经实际旅行的不可替代性,之后,在结尾部分再次与第一段呼应,并且这一部分的表述内容也比较丰富,因而大家要注意,自己观点的内容不应像普遍性结论那样过于简短。该作文中如果添加更加具体的举例论证,将会更具说服力。所以各位烤鸭们在完成自己作文的过程中一定要取范文之精华,而不要遗漏必要的论证方法哦~~

点评分析教师

周文丽Vivien,OGE雅思写作主讲。英国斯特拉斯克莱德大学学士学位,谢菲尔德大学硕士学位,对雅思考试的命题思路研究深刻透彻。

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