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雅思写作范文 | 教育和工作内卷

In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

(在教育和工作,有些人比别人更加努力。为什么有些人更努力工作?努力工作总是一件好事吗?)

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作文思路:

Question 1

Why some people are more hard working?

—-income   收入

—-providing for family  赡养家庭

—-financial freedom   财务自由

—-passion/goals  激情/目标

—-promotions  晋升

—-upbringing  抚养子女

Question 2

Being hard working is not always a good choice.

—-family stress  家庭压力

—-relationship stress  人际关系压力

—-burnout, health issue  健康问题

—-less time for self, leisure, family  没有时间休闲或照顾家庭和自己

—-taken advantage of by others  被他人所利用

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范文解析:

In education and employment, some people tend to be hardworking, where others may be less willing to put in effort at school and work. (转述题目)This essay will discuss why some people work harder than others, and consider whether this is always a good choice.(文章目的)

For many people, income is the main reason for working. Those who work harder tend to work longer hours, earning more money, meaning they are better able to provide for their family, live more comfortably and take holidays.(原因1) For other people, their job or their education may be their passion – they may love what they do or what they study, and so put all of their time and effort into ensuring they achieve their goals, whether for a career or for their education. (原因2)Furthermore, a person’s upbringing may influence their work ethic. Some people are raised to be diligent and conscientious with their schooling and employment. These people will often work harder simply because it is part of their character and disposition.(原因3)

There are obvious advantages to working hard: better education, financial stability and freedom, personal advancement and the recognition of being a reliable, industrious person. (让步)Conversely, there are also disadvantages.(转折) Working or studying harder often means less time spent with family, which can put undue stress on familial relationships, and between partners. (negative effect 1)Being hardworking can also cause health issues: a person may not take the time to relax and may become stressed and burnt out. Lack of sleep, unhealthy eating and little exercise can exacerbate these problems. Consequently, over-dedication to one’s work or education can be counter-productive.(negative effect 2)

In conclusion, though being hard working can have real and satisfying benefits, overworking can have drawbacks.(总结影响)It is important that people take a healthy approach and have a balanced lifestyle.(提出建议)

Key vocabulary:

  1. tend to  倾向于
  2. put in effort   付出努力
  3. be better able to  更有能力去做……
  4. achieve one’s goal 达到目标
  5. upbringing n. 养育
  6. ethic n. 伦理,道德规范
  7. diligent n. 勤奋的   hardworking 的同义词
  8. consciousness adj. 认真的,尽责的
  9. disposition n. 性情
  10. financial stability  财政稳定
  11. advancement n. 提升,发展
  12. industrious adj. 勤勉的  hardworking的同义词
  13. undue adj. 过度的
  14. familial adj. 家庭的   family的衍生词
  15. exacerbate v. 加剧,加重
  16. over-dedication 过度尽心尽力   dedication  奉献
  17. counter-productive 产生相反效果的   counter- 否定前缀

OGE签约作者

Tessa,就读于坎特伯雷大学英语文学和法语专业,热爱写作。

点评

该作文为8分范文

Report题型一般来讲难度相对较低,但6月19日的这道新题涉及了近期较为热门的“内卷”话题,整体来讲在report题型中相对难度偏高,且思路较为抽象。对于这样的题目,“考鸭”们应把hardworking这一抽象概念具体化,观点分析分散化,即从个人的生活,家庭,健康等多个不同的角度来分析其原因和影响,把抽象话题变为一个常规的社会话题,简单易懂的、普遍性的观点才是最切题的观点。

在范文中,作者的首尾段相对简略,这也是report题型的一大特点,重点内容则完全放在正文部分。原因部分的重心更多地向家庭和教育这样的基础方向转移;而关于影响,则采用了让步转折结构,先提及优点,再讲缺点,最终以缺点为主。此外,作文中对于hardworking 和其他的一些高频词汇给出了相对丰富的同义词替换,可供“考鸭”们参考。


点评分析教师

周文丽Vivien,OGE雅思写作主讲。英国斯特拉斯克莱德大学学士学位,谢菲尔德大学硕士学位,对雅思考试的命题思路研究深刻透彻。

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