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雅思写作8分作文|老建筑是否该为新建筑让路

Many museums and historical   sites   are mainly visited by tourists, not by local people. What are the reasons of this? What can be done to attract more   locals?

许多博物馆和历史遗迹主要是由游客参观的,而不是当地人。原因是什么?怎样才能吸引更多的当地人?

Paragraph 1

1. 转述题目内容

2. 表述文章目的(注意!第一段先不用给出具体观点)

Key words and phrases

1. struggle to 竞争

2. dominate  v. 控制,支配,占优势

Many museums and historical sites struggle to find ways to attract local interest – historically, tourists dominate visitor numbers.(转述题目) There are several reasons for this, and correspondingly, several solutions. (文章目的)

Paragraph 2—-分析原因

1. 对于当地人:

—-对于景点过于熟悉

—-不急于去景点,因为以后还有机会去

—-生活工作繁忙,没有时间去景点

2. 对于游客:

—-有足够的时间,金钱,精力去旅行

—-有旅游需求,因为以后不一定会再去

Key words and phrases

1. familiarity  n. 熟悉   词根:familiar

2. apathetic  adj. 冷漠的,无动于衷的,缺乏兴趣的

3. contend with  对付,与……做斗争

4. put aside 储存,保留

5. facilitate  v. 促进,帮助

For locals, a sense of familiarity can affect any motivation to visit these sites. This familiarity can foster an apathetic response that an attraction “will always be there”; hence, there is no urgent need to visit. (分论点1)There is also the routine of daily life to contend with: work, schooling and childcare. A resident may not have the time, nor the resources required, whereas tourists have precisely this: they have put aside money, taken time off work and made the necessary plans to facilitate their visit. (分论点2)Moreover, the apathetic locals may experience is not shared by tourists. Their visits are motivated by urgency, because they may not have a chance to visit again.(分论点3)

Paragraph 3—-分析解决方案(只针对当地人)

1. 给当地居民合理的门票折扣

2. 加强媒体宣传

3. 增加吸引力 Eg. 向其他博物馆租借新的展品

Key words and phrases

1. disparity  n. 不同,不等

2. demographics  n. 人口统计,人数统计

3. custom  n. 经常光顾,风俗,习惯

4. counter  v. 反击,还击

5. complacency  n. 满足,自满

6. drawcard  n. 卖座的节目

To combat this disparity in visitor demographics, museums and the like could offer discounts to locals as a way to encourage their custom. It is especially valuable to offer weekend discounts, as this is a more convenient time for locals to visit.  (分论点1)Advertising in local radio and newspapers, where residents are more likely to read and hear about said discounts, would also improve local visitor numbers. (分论点2)Furthermore, museums can create a sense of community by engaging with residents and offering local activities and events. To counter any complacency, holding temporary exhibitions of items borrowed from other museums would also be a drawcard for locals. (分论点3)

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强调博物馆和名胜古迹的重要性以及改善该状况的意义

Key words and phrases

1. cater to  迎合,为……服务

2. engender  v. 产生

3. patronage  n. 赞助,光顾

4. appreciate  v. 欣赏,感激

 It is crucial that museums and historical sites cater to potential visitors from their own community. (强调重要性)Not only is this good for business, it also engenders a sense that their patronage is valued and appreciated by these businesses, and is likely to result in increased return visits. (强调改善状况的意义)

OGE签约作者

Tessa,就读于坎特伯雷大学英语文学和法语专业。

点评

该作文为8分范文。

笔者的观点和结构非常清晰,正文段中有明确的列出不同的分论点,正确使用了各类连接词,并对于每个论点进行了清晰的解释和论述。该题目中存在着多方向论述的陷阱,即原因部分对于locals与tourists的比较,而解决方案的部分只与locals相关,笔者在这两个方面都进行了清晰地阐述,没有忽略tourists 的方面,也重点强调了locals的问题,没有出现问题回应上的失误。同时,笔者在文中运用了大量的高级词汇,可供各位“烤鸭”学习。

点评教师:

周文丽Vivien,OGE雅思写作主讲。英国斯特拉斯克莱德大学学士学位,谢菲尔德大学硕士学位,对雅思考试的命题思路研究深刻透彻。

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