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雅思大陆写作7.5分范文|人们之间正在变得相互依赖还是相互独立

Some people think individuals are more and more dependent on each other, while others believe we are more and more independent. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

一些人认为人们现在变得越来越互相依赖, 而其他人则认为,我们变得越来越独立了。讨论双方观点并给出你自己的看法。

写作素材:

DEPENDENT

1. 生活成本高—照顾孩子和支付房租

High cost of living – childcare and house deposits.

2. 家庭成员之间互相依赖

Reliance on family members to help.

3. 老人在面对新的科技时需要依赖他人的帮助

Older generation more reliant on help from others with technology.

4. 外包工作

Outsourcing of chores to others i.e. cooking, cleaning, admin. 

5. 公共交通

Public transport more common – reliance on others to travel.

INDEPENDENT:

1. 网络的发展

Internet access – can buy online, shop online, book travel, study, education, find friends and partners.

Working from home.

2. 社交媒体的进步,不用面对面交流

Social media – addictive, tend to use this rather than talk to others.

Cellphone use – draw us away from others.

Easier to have relationships online.

作文思路:

First paragraph:

提出双方的观点

Second paragraph:

分别讨论正反和反方:(运用素材内容)

INDEPENDENCE:

1) 用网络互相联系使人们关系疏远:Constant use of internet isolates us from others

2)  网络影响到生活的其他方面:Travel, educate, find friends and partners.

3) 电话交流减少了面对面交流:Use our phones rather than talk to others

DEPENDENCE:

1) 高生活成本导致人们互相依赖:High cost of living increases dependence on others

2) 家庭成员之间的互相帮助:Eg. Grandparents helping with childcare/Parents helping with home purchases

Third paragraph:

表述自己的观点:more independent

举例论证:依靠网络生活;在家远程办公;网络交流;能够独立照顾孩子

Many tasks now done online; working from home; conducting relationships entirely online; ability to raise children alone.

Fourth paragraph:

总结全文,与上一段呼应

范文解析:

In an increasingly online world, many people think we are becoming more independent of each other. Others believe our dependency on others has increased. This essay will discuss both views and venture my own opinion.

New vocabulary:

1. dependency  n. 从属,依赖   

2. venture  v. 小心地说,冒险

Those who argue that we are becoming more independent suggest that the dominance of the internet in quotidian life has made us increasingly isolated from each other. Consequently, our reliance on others has reduced as we utilise the internet to book travel, find romantic partners and myriad other uses. (正方观点1) Moreover, we are more likely to be absorbed in our phones than to strike up conversations with strangers. (正方观点2)Conversely, those who think we are more dependent argue that the increased cost of living means many people must rely on family members for help. For instance, many grandparents look after their grandchildren, as the cost of childcare for parents is too expensive.(反方观点1)Furthermore, as house prices increase exponentially, many parents have to help their children to buy their first home. (反方观点2)

New vocabulary:

1.dominance  n. 优势,统治,支配     词根:dominant

2.quotidian   adj. 每日的     同义词:daily

3. isolated   adj. 孤立的    be isolated from

4. reliance   n. 依赖    词根:rely

5. myriad   adj. 无数的    同义词:countless

6. be absorbed in   专心于,全神贯注于

7. exponentially   adv. 以指数方式

In my opinion, I believe we are increasingly more independent. With the habitual and addictive use of cellphones and the internet, our reliance on others has reduced dramatically. (给出观点)As mentioned, we can now do many tasks online, with very minimal contact with others. The way we work also means less contact with others – working from home has become de rigueur. (原因1)In addition, people have the ability to conduct relationships entirely online, with many people having friends or romantic partners with whom they have never met. The stigma around solo parenting has also decreased, with many adults now raising children alone, by choice.(原因2)

New vocabulary

1. habitual   adj. 习惯的,习以为常的      词根:habit

2. addictive   adj. 使人上瘾的     词根:addict

3. minimal   adj. 最低的,最小限度的      衍生词: minimum     反义词:maximal

4. de rigueur   adj. 礼节需要的

Though we will always be dependent on others to some degree, our relationships with others are largely becoming lived online, reducing our dependence on others in any real, visceral manner. 

New vocabulary:

Visceral   adj. 发自本能的

评价

该作文为8分范文。

这道题目是机经中的旧题,曾经在2013年和2016年两次出现在雅思考试中。同时,关于dependent or independent 的话题属于抽象话题,看似难度较大,但并不是完全不可以把抽象问题具体化。在这篇范文中,作者把独立和依赖的概念转换成人与人之间的练习,并结合了科技发展和社会进步的状况,将抽象的问题具体化,以不同的例子来说明观点。同时,大家也需要注意的是,双观点的题目不是只讨论正反方的观点就可以了,而是要像范文这样,给出一定的篇幅来介绍自己的主观观点。

点评教师:

周文丽Vivien,OGE雅思写作主讲。英国斯特拉斯克莱德大学学士学位,谢菲尔德大学硕士学位,对雅思考试的命题思路研究深刻透彻。

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