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雅思7.5分范文 | 推迟生育

Nowadays, men and women in many countries decide to have babies at an older age. What are the reasons?  What are the effects on society and family life?

如今,在很多国家,男性女性选择在一个相对年长的年纪生孩子。原因是什么?这样的情况对社会和家庭有怎样的影响?

答题思路:

该题目为report题型中原因+影响这一不太常见的组合,并且关于影响的问题又分为了社会和家庭两个方面,因而答题需要全面;另外题目中提到的晚育话题表面看属于家庭的范畴,但事实上其原因和影响都是多方面的,考生也需从多个角度给出观点。

参考素材:

原因:

1. 性别平等思想—-女性更加注重自身的事业发展 

2. 经济与工作的压力 

3. 能够更好地养育子女

对家庭影响:  对女性的健康有危害;年长的父母没有足够的精力照顾子女

对社会影响:思想成熟的父母能够更好的教育子女,提高人口素质,有利于社会进步

范文解析:

In a society abundant in opportunity and choice, men and women in many countries are deciding to delay childbirth. (题目改写)This essay will discuss possible reasons for this trend, and what effects it may have on society and family life.

With the demands for gender equality in education and employment during the height of second-wave feminism, more women have been able to pursue their own career path, choosing to delay marrying and having children.(原因1) Furthermore, in an increasingly competitive labour market, many couples may find it is not economically viable to have children at a younger age. By delaying parenthood, they are able to earn more and build a solid foundation for their career.(原因2) Moreover, should they decide to raise a family, this stability provides their children with a secure future. Older parents also have the advantages of experience and maturity when raising children. (原因3)

Children born to financially and emotionally stable parents tend to be better educated, healthier and are less likely to have behavioural problems. This means they are better positioned to contribute to society, have less impact on the healthcare system and are more likely to find stable employment. (对社会:积极影响)Conversely, older parents may find pregnancy more difficult, and serious health risks and complications can arise for older mothers. Furthermore, older parents may find it more difficult to raise young children as their physical abilities are reduced. Older parents may have more health concerns, in turn creating a higher demand on the healthcare system.(对家庭:消极影响)

It is inarguably better that men and women are able to make their own, informed decisions about if and when they choose to start a family. Individuals can make the choice that is right for them, considering equally the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice. (总结:承认问题的两面性)

Key vocabulary

  1. abundant in 富于,富有
  2. delay  v. 推迟
  3. gender equality  性别平等
  4. during the height of  在……的顶点
  5. feminism  女权主义
  6. labour market  劳动市场
  7. parenthood  父母身份,为人父母
  8. build a solid foundation  建立坚实的基础
  9. maturity   n. 成熟    词根:mature
  10. behavioural   adj. 行为的
  11. healthcare system  医疗体系
  12. pregnancy  怀孕
  13. complication  并发症
  14. arise  vi. 出现,发生
  15. inarguably  adv. 无可争辩地
  16. informed   adj.精明的

评价:

该作文为7.5分范文。

笔者对于这样一道综合性较强的社会话题题目,回答问题的条理十分清晰,能够熟练并准确地运用表示并列和转折对比的连接词。同时,对于原因的分析具有丰富性和多样性,并没有只拘泥于家庭的范畴,而是从健康,社会,经济等多个方面加以分析;而对于影响方面,则是明确按照题目的要求,分别从家庭和社会两个方面进行分析,但由于时间的局限,笔者社会方面分析的是正面的影响,而家庭方面分析的则是负面的影响。当然,烤鸭们,大家也可以去自主思考社会方面的负面影响和家庭方面的正面影响哦~~

点评教师:周文丽Vivien,OGE雅思写作主讲。英国斯特拉斯克莱德大学学位,谢菲尔德大学硕士学位,对雅思考试的命题思路研究深刻透彻

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