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2021.8.7 雅思大陆考场写作8分范文与解析 | 孩子是否有犯错误的自由

Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

2021.8.7雅思大陆考场大作文,教育类话题,OGE雅思教研团队 Tessa 提供范文与文章解析。

Raising children involves trust and confidence. Some people think that children should have the freedom to make mistakes, whereas others believe adults should prevent children from making mistakes. This essay will discuss the opposing sides and offer my own opinion.

It is understandable that parents want to keep their children safe from harm. By stopping their child from doing so, they keep them protected from danger and out of harm’s way. Furthermore, adults can reduce the effect of further bad consequences. For instance, by forbidding their child to drink alcohol, they not only stop them from being intoxicated, but also obstructany subsequent repercussions, such as physical or sexual harm by others and loss of property or money. Moreover, this means children will be less likely to have regrets about their past actions, reducing the risk of loss of self-esteem or confidence.

However, I believe parents should allow their children to make mistakes. Firstly, doing so helps children to build resilience. This is the ability to recover from a setback, and helps them to develop the valuable characteristic of growing from failures. Secondly, it teaches them responsibility. By making mistakes, children are able to see the consequences of their actions, and can learn to be better prepared for the future. Additionally, they learn decision-making skills. Making a mistake helps to understand how their decisions impact situations and other people. This helps to develop their thought process and grow in wisdom. Lastly, making errors teaches them about themselves. It helps a child to identify what motivates them intrinsically, and what their strengths and weaknesses are.

Making mistakes is an essential part of life and one that each of us can learn from. It teaches us about ourselves, others and how to best avoid mistakes in the future.

Brainstorming
写作思路

I first brainstormed reasons for and against and listed them. I then researched articles that discussed this issue for more information. I used articles from The Guardian, CNN and the BBC. I also researched articles on parenting websites to see what their advice was.

(首先,我将正反方观点列了出来,然后,阅读了卫报、CNN、BBC,以及抚养子女网站的相关文章,了解他们的建议。)

·  Reasons to prevent

(阻止犯错的原因)

·  Safety and prevention of harm 

 (安全和避免伤害)

·  Less regret re bad decisions

 (减少错误决定的遗憾)

·  Bad consequences – the initial consequence and further repercussion
 (不良后果,包括最初的后果和进一步的影响)

·  Maintain good self-esteem
 (维护良好的自尊)

Reasons to allow
(允许犯错的原因)

· Builds resilience- the ability to recover from a setback

(培养逆商—从挫折中恢复的能力)

· Responsibility – they see the consequences from their mistakes 

(责任感—看到犯错的后果)

· Learn decision-making skills – learn how their decisions impact a situation

(决策技能— 学习决策如何影响局面)

· Learn about themselves – it helps to identify what motivates them intrinsically
(了解自己— 确认内在的动机)

First paragraph

主体 第一段

I decided the first paragraph would focus on the reasons why children should be prevented from making mistakes. I decided to chose three points from my brainstorming.


(我决定第一段将集中讨论为什么应该防止儿童犯错误。我决定从头脑风暴中选择三点)。

I chose:

Safety and prevention of harm
(安全及阻止伤害)

Less regret which also helps with self esteem

(减少遗憾同时维护自尊)

Protection from consequences both now and in the future

(阻止当前以及未来的不良后果)

Second paragraph

主体 第二段 

In the second paragraph I decided to state my opinion (that they should be allowed to make mistakes) and then discuss the reasons for, from my brainstorming. I used all four bullet points in this paragraph.

(在第二段中,我决定陈述我的观点— 应该允许他们犯错误,然后从我的头脑风暴中讨论错误的原因。我在这一段中使用了所有四个要点。

1. 培养逆商

2. 责任感

3. 决策技能

4. 了解自己)

(Tessa 在最后一段说了犯错误在人生中的积极意义– 生活中无法避免会犯错误,从错误中了解自己和他人,学会如何更好的避免将来的错误)

Key words and phrases used for research

关键词和短语

Raising children
抚养孩子

mistakes
错误

consequences
后果

pros and cons of making mistakes
犯错误的利弊

making decision
决策

learning from mistakes
从错误中学习

self-improvement
自我完善

responsibility
责任

resilience
恢复力

decision-making skills
决策技能

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Good Luck with your IELTS Test

【作者介绍】Tessa,OGE雅思团队成员,就读于坎特伯雷大学英语文学和法语专业。本文中文翻译由OGE雅思助教团队提供。

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