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2021.2.20 雅思大陆考场写作8分范文 | 相比于学习孩子是否更需要体育活动

Parents should encourage their children to spend less time on study and more time on doing physical activities. Do you agree or disagree?

父母应该鼓励孩子花更少的时间在学习上,而将更多的时间花在体育活动上。你同意还是反对?

由OGE雅思外籍成员Tessa提供写作思路与范文

高分范文

Raising children is an exercise in balance (平衡) – for instance, some parents encourage their children to focus on studying, and others prefer their children spend less time on revision (学业)and more time on physical activities (体育活动). This essay will discuss both viewpoints and offer my own opinion.

There are a myriad of reasons (无数个原因) as to why prioritising physical activity is beneficial. Most obviously, engaging in sports and exercise is key to good health. Children who are active tend to be ill (生病) less often and recover (更快恢复)from sickness faster. Moreover, physically mobile children generally remain so throughout their life, through adolescence (青春期) and into adulthood (壮年). Furthermore, participating in team sports teaches children interpersonal skills (人际交往能力), helping them to cultivate relationships and socialise with others. Conversely however, prioritising physical activity can be to the detriment (损害)of one’s education. Children may have less time to revise and study, and consequently receive lower grades. This can also affect mental health. (精神健康) It is pertinent too to recognise that only a small percentage (小部分) of people become top athletes (顶级运动员), so parents would do well to consider whether physical training will be beneficial for their child in the long term.

In my opinion, I believe the benefits of focusing on physical activity outweigh the cons. As mentioned, not everyone will have a career in sports, however the social and relational skills it teaches are invaluable (无价的). Whatever career path a person takes, they will need to be able to communicate effectively with others and build healthy relationships. Additionally, engaging in sport teaches the value of competition and more importantly, the benefits of winning and losing. Doing so teaches a person important moral lesson (道德上的学习).

In an increasingly sedentary (久坐的)world, keeping an active lifestyle and spending time outdoors is irreplaceable (不可替代的)and vital to cultivating a well-rounded, adaptable and balanced character.

Brainstorming

写作思路

I started with brainstorming and listing the reasons why focusing on physical activity is beneficial, and then the same for the cons. After making a list I also consulted websites and journal articles, looking for further points to discuss. I used newspaper articles from The Guardian and BBC, and journal articles from educational sites. I also consulted sports training websites.

我先列举了体育运动的好处和坏处,之后在网上搜索更多资料去进一步研究。然后,我阅读新闻报纸资料,例如BBC,The Guardian, 和其它教育类网站。最后我也查阅了一下体育训练网址。

Reasons for

正 方 观 点

  • Better health, less sickness
    更健康,减少疾病
  • Being outdoors
    更多室外活动
  • Socialising- teaches social skills, winning and losing, interpersonal skills
    更多社交机会,体会输赢,增强人机交往能力
  • Cultivate teamwork and relationships
    学会合作,集体工作
  • Skills for life
    一生受益
  • Healthy competition
    健康竞争
  • Generally, remain active through their life
    生活习惯的改变

Reasons against

反 方 观 点

  • May not help in a career unless become top sportsperson
    不会有职业上的帮助,除非成为职业运动员
  • Less time for educational pursuits
    更少的学习时间
  • If not good at sports, may be bullied
    有可能遭遇霸凌
  • Not interested in sports but forced to partake
    没有兴趣,强制运动
  • Unhealthy competition, obsession
    不健康的竞争,暴躁

Body – First paragraph

主 体 段 – 首 段

I decided to write the first paragraph on reasons for and against, and chose two or three reasons for both sides as discussion points.

我决定在第一章讨论体育的弊端,然后,挑选2到3个缘由进行讨论。

FOR:

正方

  • health健康
  • long term benefits长期好处
  • social skills社交能力

AGAINST:

反方

  • less time for education更少学习时间
  • lower grades and affect on mental health成绩下滑和影响精神健康
  • less likely to have career in sports小概率成为运动员

Body – Second paragraph

主 体 段 – 第 二 段

Discussed my personal opinion, reiterating the points for physical activity and then expanding further into other reasons, such as the value of compeition, the lessons winning and losing teach, and the benefits of being outdoors (in the conclusion).

讨论我个人观点,重新更深入探讨体育活动的重要性,并且加入新的观点。例如,学习正确的竞争理念,懂得输赢,和户外活动的优势。

Keywords and phrases

关键词

  • Children孩子
  • Sports运动
  • Physical activity体育活动
  • Education教育
  • Long terms exercise benefits长期运动好处
  • Sports careers职业运动
  • Interpersonal skills人际交往能力
  • Health健康

~Good luck with your IELTS test~

【作者介绍】Tessa,OGE雅思外籍成员,母语为英语,新西兰坎特伯雷大学英语文学和法语专业。(以上中文由OGE雅思助教团队提供)

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