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2021.2.25 雅思大陆考场写作8分范文 | 学历能否带来成功

Some people believe that educational qualifications will always bring success in life. Other people say that educational qualifications do not necessarily bring success. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

有些人相信学历总能带来人生的成功。还有人说学历不一定能带来成功。讨论这两种观点并给出你的观点。

由OGE雅思外籍成员Tessa提供写作思路与范文

8分范文

For some, educational qualifications (学历) are paramount to achieving success in life. Other people argue that these achievements do not necessarily bring success.This essay will discuss both views and venture my own opinion.

In an increasingly competitive job market(竞争激烈的市场), candidates(候选人)with university qualifications (大学学历)are hired more and are more likely to have a higher income. They are also offered better work perks(更好的工作津贴) and benefits. Having qualifications in their chosen field also means they will make their way up the career ladder faster and have access to more opportunities (更多机会). Furthermore, employers recognise that a person who has chosen to study longer is more likely to apply themselves. Conversely(反过来)however, in a saturated job market (饱和的市场), some may find they are in fact over-qualified (资格过高) for jobs. They may be unable to find work in their chosen field,and instead have to work in a completely different sector. Some employers prefer to hire those with work experience(工作经验), as they have “real-life” experience.

In my opinion, having qualifications in education is more likely to guarantee success(保证成功). Though there may be some disadvantages (一些弊端), having a higher education tends to open people to more career opportunities. Those without qualifications tend to be overlooked, as employers prefer to look for employees with specific and developed skills and capabilities (专业技能和能力). Furthermore, a higher paid career (高薪职业)often creates success in other parts of life, as workers are able to purchase their own homes, have access to better health care and can save for retirement(养老储蓄). Having qualifications also helps a person to move to other career paths, as it shows they have focus and stamina(耐力).

For the majority of people, educational qualifications are the best path to achieving success (学历是通向成功的最好的途径). This applies not only in their career, but also for income, financial stability, health and long-term plans(长期计划).

Brainstorming

写作思路

I started with brainstorming and listing the reasons why qualifications are more likely to grant success, and then the same for reasons for why they may not. After making a list I also consulted websites and journal articles, looking for further points to discuss. I used newspaper articles from The Guardian, The New Yorker and the BBC, and journal articles from educational sites. I also consulted employment and university websites.

我从头脑风暴开始,列出了为什么学历更有可能获得成功的原因,然后列出了不可能获得成功的原因。在列出清单之后,我还查阅了一些网站和期刊文章,寻找进一步的讨论点。我使用了卫报、纽约客和 BBC 的报纸文章,以及教育网站的期刊文章。我还咨询了就业和大学网站。

Reasons for

正 方 观 点

  • More likely to be hired被雇佣的可能性更大
  • Better pay高薪
  • More work benefits更多工作福利
  • Achieve faster success取得更快的成功
  • Lifelong skills – focus, applying oneself, learning skills终身技能 – 专注、投入、学习技能
  • Helps in other careers帮助其他职业

Reasons against

反 方 观 点

  • Overqualified in a saturated market在饱和的市场中学历过高
  • Some employers prefer experience over qualifications一些雇主喜欢经验胜过学历
  • Less real life experience现实生活经验较少

Body – First paragraph

主 体 段 – 首 段

In the first paragraph I chose two to three reasons for each side and discussed these.
在第一段中,我为每一方选择了两到三个理由,并讨论了这些理由。

FOR:

正方

  • More likely to find work更容易找到工作
  • Better pay grade and benefits高薪和福利
  • Further career opportunities更多的职业机会

AGAINST:

反方

  • May be over qualified可能学历过高
  • Have to work elsewhere不得不在其他领域工作
  • Less life experience so may not be hired缺少生活经验,可能不被雇佣

Body – Second paragraph

主 体 段 – 第 二 段

In the second paragraph I discussed my own opinion, reiterating the reasons for and expanding further – such as more success in other parts of life, like financial stability, the ability to have their own home, better health care and stability in the future.

在第二段中,我讨论了自己的观点,重申了正方的观点,并且做了更多的扩展,比如在生活的其他方面取得更多的成功,比如经济稳定、拥有自己家的能力、更好的医疗保健和未来的稳定。

Keywords and phrases

关键词

  • Educational qualifications 学历
  • job market 就业市场
  • employee skills 员工技能
  • career success 职业成功
  • key workplace skills 关键工作技能
  • overqualified 资历过高
  • job shortages 职位短缺

~End~

Good luck with your IELTS test

【作者介绍】Tessa,OGE雅思外籍成员,母语为英语,新西兰坎特伯雷大学英语文学和法语专业。

(以上中文由OGE雅思助教团队提供)

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