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2021.3.27雅思大陆考场写作8分范文|警察携带枪支是否会导致暴力事件频发?

Some people think that if a police force carries guns, this will encourage a higher level of violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

一些人认为,警察携带枪支,会导致社会发生更多暴力事件。你在多大程度上同意或不同意?

由OGE雅思外籍成员Tessa提供写作思路与范文

8 分 范 文

In some countries like the US, police forces are armed, whereas in places like the UK, they are not. Some people argue that arming the police force encourages a more violent society. This essay will examine this argument and offer my own opinion.

Firstly, many people argue that the show of guns itself acts as a deterrent to violence. If arms are visible, people are less likely to proceed with a criminal act, as they know there is a higher chance that they will be shot. As an example, the National Rifle Association of America (NRA) points out that murder rates have plummeted since 1991. Since that time, Americans have acquired 170 million guns, and the NRA argue that this is clear evidence that being armed does not lead to more violence. Furthermore, they argue that people have more confidence in an armed police force, knowing that they will be physically protected, should they be in danger.

However, this argument ignores the data from studies done on armed police. Based on this evidence, I agree that arming the police only encourages more violence in our society. Numerous studies have found that communities where police are routinely armed experience greater use of firearms. Rather than discourage, it appears that violence only encourages more violence. If police are armed, criminals instead see this as reason to arm themselves as protection. This is a form of mutual escalation, and has become so problematic in the US that there is now a growing argument for de-escalation by disarming police. Moreover, evidence shows that a police force using guns actually leads to more accidental, and even unjustifiable, shootings of civilians by police.

By arming police, we only create a more dangerous society, where crime increases and innocent civilians are harmed.

Brainstorming

写 作 思 路

Firstly I researched the topic, using articles from CNN, The Washington Post, The Guardian and the BBC. I then brainstormed and listed reasons for each side of the argument, before deciding which side I agreed with.
首先,我使用 CNN、华盛顿邮报、卫报和 BBC 的文章研究了这个话题。然后我集思广益并列出了争论双方的理由,然后再决定我同意哪一方。

Reasons an armed police force encourages violence:

  • Studies show higher number of police shootings of innocent civilians.
  • Encourages criminals to arm themselves- escalates and increases the purchase of guns.
  • Public feel less safe- worry about accidental shootings, or unjustifiable shootings.
  • Creates a sense of oppression, rather than liberation and protection from violence.
  • Police knowledge that they are armed creates sense of over-confidence and thus over-use.

警察携带枪支会助长暴力的原因:

  • 研究表明,警察枪杀无辜平民的次数更多。
  • 鼓励犯罪分子武装自己 – 升级并增加枪支购买量。
  • 公众感觉不那么安全 – 担心意外枪击或不合理的枪击。
  • 创造一种压迫感,而不是自由和免受暴力侵害。
  • 警察知道他们有武器会造成过度自信,从而过度使用。

Reasons an armed police force does not encourage violence:

  • Argument that just a show of guns will deter acts of violence, thus discourages committing of crimes.
  • Generates confidence amongst citizens that they are physically protected by police.
  • Is a way for police to protect themselves.

警察携带枪支不会助长暴力的原因:

  • 仅展示枪支就可以阻止暴力行为,从而阻止犯罪。
  • 在公民中产生他们受到警察人身保护的信心。
  • 是警察保护自己的一种方式。

After researching the topic, I decided there was overwhelming evidence against arming police so decided I agreed with this argument.I decided the first paragraph would focus on reasons against the argument and chose two reasons to expand on. I used the example of the NRA as a way to support this side.
在研究了这个话题后,我认为有压倒性的证据反对武装警察,所以我同意这个论点。我决定第一段将重点放在反对论点的理由上,并选择了两个理由来展开。 我用 NRA 的例子作为支持这一方的方式。

Paragraph one:

  • Argument that just a show of guns will deter acts of violence, thus discourages committing of crimes. See NRA argument.
  • Generates confidence amongst citizens that they are physically protected by police.

第一段

  • 仅展示枪支就可以阻止暴力行为,从而阻止犯罪。参见 NRA 论证。
  • 在公民中产生他们受到警察人身保护的信心。

I decided the second paragraph would focus on reasons against arming police and why I supported this argument. I chose two reasons for this, and used studies done and the problem is the US as examples to support this argument.

我决定第二段将重点放在反对武装警察的理由以及我为什么支持这一论点。我为此选择了两个理由,并用目前的研究和美国本身就是问题作为论据来支持这个论点。

Paragraph two:

  • Studies show an increased risk of fatal shootings, greater use of firearms, which encourages criminals to arm themselves- escalates and increases the purchase of guns.
  • Studies show higher number of police shootings of innocent civilians.

第二段

  • 研究表明致命枪击的风险增加,更多地使用枪支会鼓励犯罪分子武装自己 – 升级并增加购买枪支。
  • 研究表明,警察枪杀无辜平民的次数更多。

Keywords and phrases:

  • Armed police武装警察
  • police safety警察的安全
  • gun control枪支管控
  • NRA美国枪支联盟
  • studies on armed police对武装警察的研究
  • guns and violence枪支与暴力
  • statistics on civilian shootings平民枪击的数据
  • armed police pros and cons武装警察的利弊

~End~

Good luck with your IELTS test

【作者介绍】Tessa,OGE雅思外籍成员,母语为英语,新西兰坎特伯雷大学英语文学和法语专业。(以上中文由OGE雅思助教团队提供)

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