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雅思写作范文|在家里教育孩子和送孩子上学的利和弊

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? 

在一些国家,在家教育子女而不是送孩子上学的父母人数有所增加。你认为这样做的好处大于缺点吗?

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Home-schooling is an increasingly common phenomenon across the world, but many parents have conflicting views on whether it is beneficial(背景句). On one hand, it can be a great way for children to master their educational content in a secure home environment and follow a schedule that is comfortable for them. Conversely, it may cause some significant issues surrounding socialisation and could hinder a child’s ability to cooperate with others(论点).

With a variety of educational platforms and a wealth of information available online, home-schooling is not only accessible but relatively straight-forward. Home-schooling allows parents to monitor the content that their child learns. Moreover, they can check that it is both effective and enjoyable(观点1). Additionally, the ease of studying from home is unparalleled. There will be no rush in the morning to drive to school in traffic jams and no worries about children’s safety on public transport. Children might also have more time for breaks, and it overall provides a less stressful experience(观点2)

The disadvantages of home-schooling are numerous (观点句:承上启下) . If a child attends class at home, they will not be immersed in a classroom environment. Although they might not face issues like bullying, they will also have significantly less chances to make friends and find common interests with others. (观点1:短期影响)This could have long-term consequences, such as a teenager graduating high school without the ability to work in a team, which may in turn make it hard for them to succeed at university and find a good job. (观点2:长期影响)

Overall, the advantages of home-schooling are substantially overshadowed by the disadvantages(重申观点). Parents should think extremely carefully before deciding to home-school. Furthermore, it is crucial for a child’s development to be in regular social contact with other children. If home-schooling is unavoidable, parents need to make sure that their child can join some other social activities such as sports teams or interest clubs, otherwise it could be detrimental for the child’s development (给出建议).

关键词

  • conversely  adv.相反地  同义短语:on the contrary
  • accessible  adj. 可获得的
  • relatively  adv. 相对地
  • unparalleled adj.无双的 词根:parallel  adj. 平行的 
  • numerous  adj. 许多的/大量的
  • immersev. 沉浸/使陷入
  • significantly adv. 显著地 词根:significant  adj. 重大的/重要的
  • overshadow  v. 使..失色/比..更显眼词根:shadow阴影
  • social contact社交联系
  • unavoidable   adj. 不可避免的
  • detrimental  adj. 不利的/有害的

点评

本文首尾两段明确disadvantage观点,中间正文两段提出多个分论点进行论述,采用让步转折结构,先讲对立观点(advantage),后讲己方观点(disadvantage)。多个观点循序渐进,紧扣主题,文中出现大量高级词汇及不同语法句式,可供备考参考。

点评老师:周文丽Vivien:OGE雅思写作主讲。英国斯特拉斯克莱德大学学士学位,谢菲尔德大学硕士学位,对雅思考试的命题思路研究深刻透彻。

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