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2021.8.28大陆雅思写作8分范文| 上大学之前是否需要旅行或工作一段时间?

School leavers go travelling or work for a period before they go directly to university. Are there more advantages or disadvantages on their study?

离校生在上大学之前要去旅行或工作一段时间,在学业上是否有优点或缺点?

8分范文

Traditionally, most people choose toattend university immediately after finishing college. However, other people choose instead to go travelling overseas, or work for a period before taking up tertiary study, and have good reasons to do so. This essay will discuss those reasons, and consider whether there are more advantages or disadvantages on their study.

传统上,大多数人选择在高中毕业后立即上大学。然而,其他人选择出国旅游,或在接受高等教育之前工作一段时间,并且有充分的理由这样做。本文将讨论这些原因,并思考在他们的学习上是否能够带来更多优点或者更多缺点。

People who attend university immediately after high school have the advantage of attending with their friends and acquaintances. Those who choose to delay study and travel or work first will findthat when they do decide to go to university, they will know less people, and maystruggle with feelings of loneliness and isolation. This is especially true foradult students. For example, at Yale University in the United States, statisticsfrom 2021 show almost 80% of students are aged under 30. Furthermore, attending university at an older age can also have a detrimental affect on study, asit becomes more difficult to learn and retain information as one ages, whichcan be discouraging.

高中一毕业就上大学的人有与朋友和熟人一起上大学的优势。那些选择先推迟学习去旅行或工作的人会发现,当他们决定上大学时,他们认识的人会更少,并且可能深陷孤独和疏离感中。成人学生尤其如此。例如,在美国耶鲁大学,2021年的统计数据显示,近80%的学生年龄在30岁以下。此外,年龄较大的学生上大学也会对学习产生不利影响,因为随着年龄的增长,学习和记忆信息变得更加困难,这可能会令人沮丧。

However, overall there are more significant advantages to travelling and working before studying. For one, this helps people to gain the very valuable skill of life experience. Being able to communicate effectively with others, to know how to accept failures and celebrate successes, and to understand one’s self and other’s differences – allof these are hugely important skills that one can only learn through travel andwork. Moreover, as we age we become more mature, which isespecially crucial when it comes to decision making. Additionally,working before study helps us to gain a strong work ethic, so we can really succeed and make the most of our time at university.

然而,总的来说,在学习之前旅行和工作有更显著的优势。首先,这有助于人们获得非常宝贵的生活经验技能。能够与他人有效沟通,知道如何接受失败和庆祝成功,了解自己和他人的差异,所有这些都是非常重要的技能,只有通过旅行和工作才能学到。此外,随着年龄的增长,我们变得更加成熟,这在决策方面尤为重要。并且在学习之前先工作有助于我们获得强烈的职业道德,这样我们才能真正成功并充分利用我们在大学的时间。

The advantages to travelling and workingbefore attending university are much more weighty and consequential than anydisadvantages, and should be encouraged.

在上大学之前旅行和工作的益处大于弊,因此应该予以鼓励。

Brainstorming

写作思路

First I considered the advantages and disadvantages and listed these, and then didresearch on the topic to strengthen my reasons and find more pros and cons. Iread articles from The Guardian, The Washington Post and CNN, and I also readup articles from university websites, government websites for students andjournal articles.

首先我考虑了优点和缺点,列出了它们,然后对这个话题进行了研究,以加强我的理由并且找到更多的优点和缺点。我阅读了《卫报》、《华盛顿邮报》和CNN的文章,也阅读大学网站、政府学生网站和期刊文章。

Disadvantages:

  • Graduating later may mean jobs are alreadytaken by younger graduates.
  • Less people their own age at university –might feel isolated and depressed.
  • Being older means study can be harder,difficult to to take in new information and retain it.
  • Lose motivation as not earning money so maydecide to go back to work.
  • Depending on age may lose study benefits –some older students do not qualify for student loans.

缺点:

  • 晚些毕业可能意味着工作已经被年轻的毕业生占据;
  • 很少有同龄的人在大学里会感到孤独和沮丧;
  • 年龄越大,学习就越困难,很难吸收和记忆新信息;
  • 因为没有挣钱而失去动力,所以可能会决定回去工作;
  • 根据年龄的不同,可能会失去学习福利,一些年龄较大的学生没有资格获得学生贷款。

Advantages:

  • Gain valuable life experience from peopleof different cultures – learn more about others and self;
  • Maturity – helps with decision making andproblem solving
  • Better communication skills as we age;
  • By working first we gain a stronger workethic which will then help with studying;
  • More independent – better ability to lookafter oneself while studying;
  • Working beforehand means we are able to save before studying.

优点:

  • 从不同文化背景的人那里获得宝贵的生活经验—更多地了解他人和自己;
  • 成熟度—有助于决策和解决问题;
  • 随着年龄的增长,我们的沟通能力会提高;
  • 通过先工作,我们获得了更强的职业道德,这将有助于学习;
  • 更独立—学习时更好地照顾自己;
  • 提前工作意味着我们可以在学习前储蓄。

I decided the first paragraph would focuson the disadvantages, and chose two reasons to focus on and expand.

Paragraph one:

  • Less people their own age atuniversity – might feel isolated and depressed.
  • Being older means study can beharder, difficult to to take in new information and retain it.

我决定主体第一段将重点放在缺点上,并选择了两个理由来集中和扩展。

主体第一段:

•与自己同龄的人在大学里可能会感到孤独和沮丧的人更少。

•年龄越大,学习就越困难,很难吸收和记忆新信息。

In the second paragraph, I chose to focus on the advantages, and chose three points to focus on, as my argument was that there are more advantages than disadvantages.

Paragraph two:

  • Gain valuable life experience from people of different cultures – learn more about others and self
  • Maturity – helps with decisionmaking and problem solving
  • By working first we gain a stronger work ethic which will then help with studying

在主体第二段中,我选择了重点讨论优点,并选择了三个论点,因为我的观点是优点多于缺点。

主体第二段:

  • 从不同文化背景的人那里获得宝贵的生活经验–更多地了解他人和自己
  • 成熟度—有助于决策和解决问题
  • 通过先工作,我们获得了更强的职业道德,这将有助于学习

Key words and phrases:

关键词

  • university大学
  • older students年龄大的学生
  • life experience生活经验
  • gap year间隔年
  • maturity成熟
  • culture and travelling文化和旅行
  • work experience工作经验
  • student statistics学生统计.

~End~

Good luck with your IELTS test

【作者介绍】Tessa,OGE雅思外籍成员,母语为英语,新西兰坎特伯雷大学英语文学和法语专业。(以上中文由OGE雅思助教团队提供)

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