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2021.7.10雅思大陆写作8分作文 | 扫盲是否比青年教育更重要

​​The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

许多国家都高度重视年轻人的教育。然而,教育不会写或读的成年人更为重要,政府应该在这方面花更多的钱。你在多大程度上同意或不同意?

由OGE雅思外籍成员Viola提供写作思路与范文

8 分 范 文

The majority of countries in the world provide free education for children. For example in China and Korea, there is primary to secondary school education. These institutions(公共机构 ) are often heavily subsidized(资助) by the government. Despite that(尽管如此), some believe that teaching illiterate(文盲的) adults how to read or write should be prioritized. While I agree that this is crucial, the education of young people must also not be neglected.

Nations like Norway, Finland, and Germany are famous for their free tertiary education(高等教育). This is offered to locals and international students alike, proving that governments value higher education for their citizens. Undeniably, young people require assistance to pursue further academia(学术生涯). Since they are the future workforce, investing into them is practical.

However, if adults do not receive proper education,illiteracy(文盲) will impact the society as a whole. The main issue is unemployment among older people. Employment opportunities are slim(微小的) for those without the basic skill of reading and writing. They often have lower earnings, poorer health and higher rates ofincarceration(监禁). Also, they are more prone to workplace accidents or misuse ofmedication(药物). These factors mayhinder(阻碍) society’s development overall. Therefore, governments should focus more on educating illiterate adults if they hope to encourage economic and social growth. Research shows that there is a direct positive correlation(正相关) between literacy rate and per capita(人均) income in a country. If governments can spend money effectively on improving the country’s literacy, the whole of society may be improved.

In conclusion, I believe that the government’s goal should be to achieve basic literacy for the whole population. In turn, this ensures that people can continue to gain knowledge with help from the internet and other free resources. Governments should allocate money towards improving literacy rates for adults, especially the convicts(罪犯) and unemployed, who have urgent need for it in ourtext-heavy(重视文化的) world.

【作者介绍】Viola,出生于香港,OGE雅思教研团队成员,奥克兰大学跨国文化与创新实践专业,全球研究学士学位课程。(以上中文由OGE雅思助教团队提供)

Brainstorming

头 脑 风 暴

段落1:强调教育的重要性观点:对于年轻人的教育和对于成年人的“扫盲”同样重要—-不同意题目观点

段落2:让步段:以几个欧洲国家为例,论述了免费的高等教育对于年轻人未来事业发展的帮助。

段落3:转折段1:以经济收入和医疗为例,论述了低识字率对于国家社会的危害。

段落4:转折段2:以识字率与人均收入关系的调查为例,再次强调提高识字率的重要性

段落5:结论:政府应优先提升民众的识字率,与第一段相呼应

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本文为8分范文。该题目考察的是一个新的话题方向,可以总结为普通高等教育和扫盲教育重要性的对比关系。同时,对于强调比较关系的单观点题目,不同意的观点不一定是A没有B重要,而是两者同样重要,这也是笔者这篇文章的论证主题所在,两者的重要性都写也可以丰富文中的观点内容。此外,对于教育这一普遍性话题,论证其重要性也需跳出教育本身的框架,结合就业,社会等多个方面去进行论证,所以这里也建议‘烤鸭’们更多地把教育话题看做综合型话题来论述。

【点评教师】周文丽Vivien。OGE雅思写作主讲。英国斯特拉斯克莱德大学学士学位,谢菲尔德大学硕士学位,对雅思考试的命题思路研究深刻透彻。

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